Saturday, May 17, 2008

TEARS in HOSPITAL

It was not a normal day for Rohit.Finished his meeting by 11.00.He was tired.He was weak.His mind was not in his office.It was somewhere outside.But work pressure and some new projects brought him here.
"Suzzane, can u get me a cup of coffee."
"Sure Sir."
She was looking ravishing that day. White top hiding breast which could have given any Greek goddess a complex and tight black skirt on perfectly curved buttocks. A cute face with smile on it and pair of eyes which could make any normal person a poet. No boss could have asked for a better secretary.
"Sir here's your coffee"
"Thanks Suzzane. And you looking great today"
"Thanks Sir."
"Sir, can i ask you something"
"ummmm"
"Whats bothering you these days.You seems to be quite restless."
"You know what Priya is going through.I want to be with her.But work keeps me here all the time.Last two nights i couldn't talk to her.Reached home after she slept and leaves before she wakes up.She's afraid.Even i am."
"Sir everything will be fine.Have faith in God."
"Hmmmmm"
He started checking his mails.Suzzane started preparing for next meeting which was scheduled for 1.00pm.
Tring Tring
Suzzane picked it up.After having a small conversation she hanged up and turned towards Rohit.By sensing her eyes he knew something was wrong.
"Whats the matter"
"Sir,Priya Madam is admitted in Hinduja Hospital.The call was from your dad."
"Oh my God.I am leaving now.And cancel all my meetings for a week"
"OK Sir."
Rohit hopped into his Safari.Hinduja Hospital was like 20 min from his work place.
"Why did i leave her alone today"
"I hope every thing's fine"
He tried hard to concentrate on road.Tears,anxiousness made it really difficult.
Finally he reached hospital.Parked his car and ran towards receptionist.
"Priya Sharma"
"Third floor"
He ran.He climbed three steps at a time.In 3rd floor he searched for his father.
"Nurse can you please tell me where's Priya sharma"
"Room 303" and pointed her finger towards his dad.
He sprinted.
"Dad hows she"
"Shes inside operation theater."
"Anything serious."
"Everything will be fine beta".
Just then a nurse came out of the theater and asked.
"Mr Sharma"
"Yes"
"Congrats its a girl."
A drop of salt water dripped down his eyes.

63 comments:

Sachin Sawant said...

hey, good story dude :)

Anonymous said...

That was great! You had very good description. I really enjoyed that!! I was thinking kinda bad.. I thought maybe she had died...but you had a happy ending!!!

Ne.

Occasional Brilliance said...

for a second i was so tense and the last line helped me find relief...

Keshi said...

so Nirmal is thinking of making babies..


Great writing man!

Keshi.

Rià said...

nice story!!and thanks for the happy ending....i was expecting it to b sad. :)

§ωατι §ετhι said...

Ahaan!!
Nice..
But wht made u think of this one? :)
Jst out of curiousity!! :)

Nirmal said...

@sachin..
thanks man..

Nirmal said...

@nehya..
no bad ending in my story gal..lol
thanks

Nirmal said...

@bubble..
thanks ..tat means i m a good writer..lol

Nirmal said...

@keshi..
yup tat process is good...but not the tensed stage..lol

Nirmal said...

@ria..
dont expect anythimg bad from me....hehehe

Nirmal said...

@swati...
thanks ....wat made me write this....

even i dont know....

Unknown said...

Okay one thing...
Was there more to this story than just the anxiety about the imminent childbirth?

Because if it was, and if it is about what I think it was, this was quite nicely described, though incomplete.

Nirmal said...

@alok..
i guess it was only bout anxiety..

and thers ought to be mistakes as it was my first attempt writing such stuffs..

AG said...

hmmmm

nice nice
a few more lines can be added

cheers

Macadamia The Nut said...

Whew! I was prepared for the worst!
CUTE story! :D

Keshi said...

**yup tat process is good...but not the tensed stage

thats such a GUY thing to say LOL!


Witches cant hv babies u know...oooooooo!

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

@aditi....
ha ha will add in my next story...lol

Nirmal said...

@the nut..
thanks..

Nirmal said...

@keshi...
guy thing...lol

witches cant have babies...
tats y i will only date witches but marry a human gal.....lol

Anonymous said...

salt water? someone peed on his eyes? .. jokes apart.. was too gud bro

Nirmal said...

@chriz...
baby might have peed....lol...

thanks man..

Keshi said...

u mean u'll date witchtitutes?

LOL!

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

@keshi..
u date -----titutes,,..

i thought they r only for lust....lol

Nits said...

nice one buddy...
actually i predicted it...i guess its the DAN BROWN effect!..;-)

Keshi said...

well dating is for lust too..LOL! very rarely it ends up being love. :):)

Keshi.

Keshi said...

go read my reply to ya in Sol's blog..where u asked me if I dun mind marrying a younger guy. :):)

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

@nits..
i will take it as a compliment...but its no where near him..lol

Nirmal said...

@keshi..
for me dating is for fun and knowing a person....lust comes later part...

yup replied for your comment go read it..

Keshi said...
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Keshi said...

**for me dating is for fun and knowing a person....lust comes later part...

r ya trying to impress me? LOL! ok ok I believe ya.


For me dating is to get to know male Witches and eat sandwiches.


Keshi.

Nirmal said...

@keshi..
***** know male Witches *****
tat i m not....lol

***sandwitches***
i am impressed.....lol

Keshi said...

why r ya so impressed abt sandwiches? its not like ur the spread is it LOL!

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

@keshi..
i am luv date and sandwiches coz it has got both..

gal and food..

u c some part of me resembles joey...lol

Gunjan Aylawadi said...

inspiration kya thi iske peeche??

Nirmal said...

i really dont know gunj...just wanted to c if i cud keep my readers on toes...

Mysterious Mia said...

nice one there.....the ending was good, i thought it wud be a tragedy

Nirmal said...

@anvita...no tragedy or sad end in my story gal..of life..heheh

Xorkes said...

ahaaa.. now nirmal writes stories also.. well well lets c whats more in store..
how come baby planning?? hehehe

Nirmal said...

@xorkes..
i always plan bout babies...lol

Rho Tau GWIS said...

Awww..

Nirmal said...

@carolingal..

wat was tat...awwwwwful or awwwwwsome...lol

Keshi said...

gal n food...sounds like witch and broomstick. LOL!

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

@keshi...
u compared my gal with witch and my food with broomstick...
now i m angry....huh

Keshi said...

*tickles Nirmal til his anger turns into a yummy sandwich*

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

nirmal ignores tickle by keshi but sandwich brought a alittle smile on his face...

lol

Keshi said...

gawd u greedy guy lol!

Keshi.

Nirmal said...

hahah gals made me....lol keshi...

Satanic Angel said...

awwwww! nice story ya..yu sure u wrote this senti stuff? Am amazed! nice nice.

Satanic Angel said...

n hey nice new profile picture

Nirmal said...

@elusive...
wat made u feel i cant write such stuffs....i m a sentifellow....lol..

and thanks i m blushing..lol

Unknown said...

Dunno why there is a hint of uncertainty in your protagonist's attitude...

Like he's not ready for the thing yet, like he wants to avoid it. Or he's not too attached to his wife.

Or maybe its just me. Anyways, nice first.

ceedy said...

neat :)

Nirmal said...

@alok..
really???i dint had any of those things in my mind when i was writing it...may be my lack of experiebce..thanks man..

Nirmal said...

@ceedy..
thanks..

Lena said...

really a touching story.. am glad it has a happy end :)

Nirmal said...

thanks lena...

Satish Bolla said...

man, u had my heart in the mouth while reading this one. u maintained the suspense well. but y did u bring the suzanne sensuality in the middle???

Nirmal said...

@satish.....
i wanted to show tat even though such a beautifuyl gal was in front of him he dint try to flirt much...coz he was in tension..only ended with u looking gud..

chimbulala said...

het nimu it was gud one but some one like me wont like it, but one for sure u`ve got the ability to paint a scene with words (which is the esssential thing needed for a writer) rest comes through the thought process. i feel u should increase ur horizons to expressions which will create permanent impression in the reader`s mind and believe me ur language has dat permanent waaala thing in it..... great effort

ishqia said...

well written...

Nirmal said...

@ranjit..

thamks bro..

Nirmal said...

@ishiqia..

thanks gal..